after sun
and that day writ before
where i pulled at weeds and shores
muscles in my back
what about that law
which pulled hair
and cotton
for rich words
gosh
still after pulling threads
for marred glass panes, views
of adonis in the streets through
and though the season
2 comments:
this is really awesome, molly. your diction and syntax (not to sound like a textbook) work really well together in this poem. muy bien.
hey alex. first my name for you: mollie.
would you tell me about what your commenting on. i've been entertaining the concept of witness. of the form to the content, or visa versa. so on or so forth. i've just started working it through. i think it's more obscure here than in Semi Trucks i just put up. i think one way i might be able to create the effect in a way that also binds up the reader and author is through the juxtaposition of somehow sometimes simple diction and syntax with undercurrent obscurity. maybe.
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